Monday 24 October 2016

Responding to feedback

It is 9:30 am. Mum had just finished saying. “Time to pick up Deakyn and go to Reefton skatepark.’’
Then Locky arrived, just in time to go. I know this is going to be the  perfect day.


The trip was good. The road was smooth and I was hungry Mum gave us a wheels packet and wooly watch. The car was a mess, we stopped to pick up Deakyn. We pretended to play video games for awhile before we arrived at Reefton skatepark.


As soon as we arrived I snatched up my skateboard, jumped on and went down a steep slope. .It was fun speeding down the slope on my skateboard. I only went down once before I tried the big dome.
After I went in the big dome I had something to eat I had a packet of chip and a ribena. After the snack I felt brave enough to hit the steeper slope. I jumped on my scooter and rolled down the steeper slope. I was getting tired now. I came back to Mum for lunch. I had a chicken bun and a sandwich. This was delicious and just what I needed to skate again.


Finally I hopped on my scooter and scootered around everywhere. By this time we were all tired but before we left we went to the dairy to get a  frozen milk shake. It was very good. We dropped  Deakyn off on the way home and travelled to Blackball skatepark.
This was the best day ever. I cannot wait until next time.

Wednesday 19 October 2016

Scarf

Tuesday 18 October 2016

Boat Ride

Friday 14 October 2016

Thursday 13 October 2016

The Perfect Day

I am learning to make my writing more interesting for the reader. I know I will be able to do this when I add more detail, use interesting words and include what I can see, hear, smell and feel. I started with my brainstorm.

It is 9:30 am. Mum had just finished saying. “Time to pick up Deakyn and go to Reefton skatepark.’’
Then Locky arrived, just in time to go. I know this is going to be the  perfect day.

The trip was good. The road was smooth and I was hungry. The car was a mess, we stopped to pick up Deakyn. We pretended to play video games for awhile before we arrived at Reefton skatepark.

As soon as we arrived I grabbed my skateboard and went down the steep slope.  I only went down once before I tried the big dome.
After the big dome I had something to eat, got on my scooter and went down a steeper slope. I was getting tired now. I came back to Mum for lunch. I had a chicken bun and a sandwich. This was delicious and just what I needed to skate again.

Finally I went on my scooter and scootered around everywhere. By this time we were all tired but before we left we went to the dairy to get a  frozen milk shake. It was very good. We dropped  Deakyn off on the way home and travelled to Blackball skatepark.

This was the best day ever. I cannot wait until next time.